Everything is good except a couple things on the face.
A) The smile: the narrowing down that you did at the bottom makes her expression look a tad manic; I’m a little afraid that Hazuki wants to kill me. You should have gone with the smile in the first sketch.
B) I don’t know if it’s the eyes, or the eyebrows, or the nose, but the impression I’m getting is either slightly psychotic (like the above) or really unhappy and trying desperately to hide it.
My sleep-deprived mind has tried to think of a clever popsicle-as-phallic-object joke, but I’ve been awake for 22 hours, I need to be awake in 7 hours, and the noggin isn’t up to the challenge and I need to go to bed verrrrrry badly. Disregarding that rambling disaster of a sentence, I can confidently say that she looks adorable and slightly devious all at once. The outfit is completely appropriate to the character, too.
Everything is good except a couple things on the face.
A) The smile: the narrowing down that you did at the bottom makes her expression look a tad manic; I’m a little afraid that Hazuki wants to kill me. You should have gone with the smile in the first sketch.
B) I don’t know if it’s the eyes, or the eyebrows, or the nose, but the impression I’m getting is either slightly psychotic (like the above) or really unhappy and trying desperately to hide it.
Having said that, I do like the colors.
Her smile does look forced, but she’s cute nonetheless :3
Those eyes…look sad…
And the Popsicle looks like it has been glued to her fingertips. We want to see a nice and firm grip on on the next Hazuki…
Otherwise it’s fine. For me at least, 2channel and 4chan however might take longer to be convinced…
@Ryoko: Probably that’s what I meant when I called it an ‘American smile’…
What’s with the face? Does Hazuki have AIDS?
Otherwise, this looks pretty decent. She looks different than your other girls, which is a step up.
@Everyone Above: It’s fan-art and fits her demented demeanor quite nicely, or at least one of them.
Personally, it looks amazing; you’re definitely getting better man, keep it up.
Cutting off her left arm is a bad layout/pose decision, unless, of course, you were drawing guro.
Work on her hand and wrist, otherwise I like it… Ya know, aside from the whole SFW thing.
Why does everyone keep complaining about the smile? OH NOES IT’S NOT COMPLETELY WEEABOO STYLE
You’re improving, I must say.
>Why does everyone keep complaining about the smile? OH NOES IT’S NOT COMPLETELY WEEABOO STYLE
Exactly. Wiildarms is a weeaboo, the art is by Wildarms, therefore the art should reflect his weeaboo-ness.
Or it could be constructive criticism and you need to lay off the shift key.
My sleep-deprived mind has tried to think of a clever popsicle-as-phallic-object joke, but I’ve been awake for 22 hours, I need to be awake in 7 hours, and the noggin isn’t up to the challenge and I need to go to bed verrrrrry badly. Disregarding that rambling disaster of a sentence, I can confidently say that she looks adorable and slightly devious all at once. The outfit is completely appropriate to the character, too.